Any comments or advise

[Nick Toye]

Could I please have some constructive criticism on my site.

Any advice on what I could do to make it more functional, or any suggestions would be very appreciated.

http://myweb.tiscali.co.uk/nicktoye/

Thanks

[pellepiano]

I think its to neutral. And lacks color.

And details like the rectangular outline that goes to the different menu buttons, I does not look good when its not centered around the buttons. And its to small for some. You could adjust it to change size for the buttons that would be a nice effect.Some deacceleration or elasticity would not hurt either.
Same goes for the top buttons that scroll.

I gets a little boring just seeing some text appear for almost all sections. I would try to make some more interesting typography if there are as many text sections as there are now. Its amazing what the correct blend of fonts, or bold/regular or big / smallcaps can do.

When clicking on links the rectangle outline does not stop.

On the other hand I quite liked your design on the magictorch site, that made a better impression on me.

The Flash movies are far too simple in my opinion as a showcase of what you can do. I would change them. When you read about them you are expecting something completely different.

I dont want to be mean or anything, this is just my opinion. Its always easier to find faults on someone elses sites than your own =) . Thats why these forums are so great, you get a lot of peoples opinions, often more straight than from your buddies.

[Nick Toye]

Thanks for the comments.

But as Samuel L Jackson once said, "allow me to retort"

The colouring is like that because I like those kind of pastel type colours. I was considering using a green as well.

The bottom rectangle moving box, it isn't finished I'm still working on that, but I can see how you may think that it was complete. The site as a whole is still work in progress, but I'm updating constantly at the moment.

Also the same with the links non stop rectangle thing.

Deacceleration/elasticity, would that be in tweening, any good tutorials out there?

I have considered some imagery, or something to break up the text. It isn't supposed to be a pure textual site.

Ooops I've just realised that you think the magictorch is my site, believe me i wish it was, no the personal section refers to my favourite sites, I think I'll have to change the wording of that. Thanks for inadvertently pointing that out to me.

Again the flash movies are work in progress, the second one is just a placeholder for the finished movie that i'm working on.

I suppose I should have mentioned that it is still work in progress.

Nevermind.

Anyway thanks for the comments, they mean a great deal to me and show me where I can amend things to make it better.

Cheers

[pellepiano]

A coll thing with Flash is that you can get "animation" for free, with some script.
Suppose your rectangle is a movieclip and you want it to travel to a certain x position ( the buttons). You can apply this little script ON the movieclip and it will travel and slow down until it reaches its position (which it gets from the buttons). Very easy and cool.

//On the movieclip
onClipEvent (enterFrame) {
this._x += (xpos-this._x)/7;
}


//On a button
on(release){
// Give position för rectangle mc
xpos=340;
}

Give it a try.

Or have it follow the mouse

//On the movieclip
onClipEvent (enterFrame) {
this._x += (_root._xmouse-this._x)/7;
}

[pellepiano]

Of course I made a typo. On the first example ( goto button position ) of code there must be e reference to the root.

//On the movieclip
onClipEvent (enterFrame) {
this._x += (_root.xpos-this._x)/7;
}